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Recently Booked A Part-time Course At A College, You Now Need To Cancel - GT Letter Band 9 Sample You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You recently booked a part-time course at a college. You now need to cancel your booking. Write a letter to the college administrator. In your letter: say which part-time course you booked explain why you need to cancel your booking ask about booking a different course You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam..........,

#course #college #gt #band #sample #minutes #administrator #addresses #sir #madam
Dear Sir, I am
writng
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writing
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cancellation
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 of
GST
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course
 that
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ahve
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have
 taken as a
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part-time
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 time.
i
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 want to cancel
this
course
 because
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 thought GST
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bw
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be
 an
esay
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easy
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course
 and it
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 enhance my poartfolio but when
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 checked the syllabus of
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relised
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realised
 that they dont have the topics that
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 want to study so
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 will be not suited for me. I paid $1200 for
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. when i was going through the other
couses
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courses
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have
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saw income tax will cover all the
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topics that
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 want to study and
i
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 will help me in my
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career
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 will opt for income tax and plz adjust the fees. Awaiting your prompt reply yours faithfully Bharat Singla
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coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, ensure you have a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs for each point, and a conclusion. Use linking words effectively to ensure smooth transitions between ideas.
task achievement
To enhance task achievement, make sure you address all parts of the prompt explicitly. Clarify the full course title, describe the reasons for cancellation more thoroughly, and formalize the request to switch courses. Use a wider range of vocabulary and grammar structures to convey your message more effectively.
general
Proofread your letter for typos or spelling errors, such as 'writng', 'ahve', 'bw', 'esay', 'relised', 'couses', 'saw', and 'carrer'. Additionally, aim to use more formal language and maintain this tone throughout the letter. Avoid contractions and casual expressions for a more professional presentation.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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