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Promotions to higher level should be from within company and not to a new person from outside. Do you agree or disagree?

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It has been asserted by some that the right to receive a promotion should be exclusively reserved for internal
employees
 of the
company
 rather than hiring any candidate from outside. I agree with
this
 suggestion despite the recruitment of outside workers may have its own possible benefits. The most significant benefits for the
company
 itself,
as
Correct word choice
that
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 it helps the employer to save a substantial amount of cost
which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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required to
hire
Wrong verb form
hiring
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an external
Correct the article-noun agreement
external employees
an external employee
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employees
 in the form of job advertisements, accommodation and most specifically is providing comprehensive training to the freshers to help them to adapt themselves with the
company
's system and work culture from the beginning.
On the contrary
, existing
employees
 who already have prior experience and knowledge would require quite less training to adjust to their new role ensuring continuous productivity without any disruption.
Additionally
, promoting workers from inside the organization fosters a sense of loyalty among the working
employees
 when they see their peers elevated to higher positions promotes eagerness among all the
employees
 which
further
 motivates them to work harder than before to get the same position in future not only helps to achieve their own goals but
also
 increases the productivity of the
company
.
Moreover
, retaining the current staff helps the business maintain goodwill among the competitors
as well as
 lowering the level of turnover.
However
, getting candidates from outside sometimes may bring new ideas to the table which helps the firm to come out with new innovative products in the market. At the same time, a prior network of newcomers with other corporations may open the door for the
company
 to new partnerships with them.
To sum up
, indeed promotions inside the work have more benefits so it is advisable to promote staff within the
company
 itself but sometimes when it does not yield the required skills
then
 it is better to look outside as well.
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