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The charts below show the proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented pie charts illustrate the percentage of
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UK students who were able to speak another
language
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in addition
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 to English in a particular university in
two
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 different years, 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the highest ratio belonged to Spanish in both years.
Additionally
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, in 2000, German and
two
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 other
languages
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 had the lowest portions,
whereas
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 in 2010, French, no other
language
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, and
two
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 other
languages
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 had the lowest ratios equally. In detail, in 2000, 30% of British pupils spoke Spanish.
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, students who spoke only English accounted for 20%. Meanwhile, both French only and another
language
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 accounted for 15 per cent each, and the lowest ratio was dedicated to German and
two
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 other
languages
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 at 10% for each of them. In 2010, Spanish and another
language
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 consisted of one-third and 20 per cent respectively.
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further
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 by pupils who spoke
two
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 other
languages
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in addition
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 to their mother
language
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 at 15% and the other three parts namely, no other
language
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, French, and German constituted 30% of all mentioned parts,
while
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 each of them accounted for just 10%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words language, two, languages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • additional languages
  • proficiency
  • decade
  • trends in language learning
  • globalization
  • cultural shifts
  • inferred
  • shifted
  • popularity
  • decrease/increase in speakers
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