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The map below shows the development of the town of Stromer between 1995 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the town of Stromer between 1995 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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depict
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depicts
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the
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information about
down town
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downtown
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of
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stromer
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Stromer
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 which
were
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was
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 developed from 1995 till the present day after the analysis, it is clearly stated that in 1995 towards
north
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the north
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 direction houses
are
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were
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 replaced by
the
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apply
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two apartment buildings in the same way
forest
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the forest
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 which covered most of the area
is now shorten
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is now shortened
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 and
aadjacent
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adjacent
 to it
a
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an
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enlarge
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 route
of
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airport is established for the people to travel
similarly
, coming towards the centre area, shops are increased with having school at the middle for adolescent
furthermore
, coming towards the bottom there was a huge farmland for the farmers to grow seeds now it has been substituted by the number of apartments which located in
south western
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southwestern
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subsequently
, above the farmland
house
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houses
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is
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are
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 constructed and
number
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the number
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 of shops has been increased
overall
, it is clearly stated that the infrastructure of
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streamers
stromers city
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Stromers City
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 has seen
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development
developement
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development
 from housing to
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multiple
multiples
mutiples
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multiple
 shops and with
advancement
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the advancement
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 of
airport
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the airport
an airport
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 for the traveller
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