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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuels source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuels source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the production of
the
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electricity with different energy in Australia and
Frace
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France
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 between 1980
to
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and
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 2000.
Overall
,
Australian
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Australians
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 are more
incline
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 to use
the
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coal rather than
the
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oil and natural
gas
 in 1980 and 2020.
However
,
French
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the French
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 used more
on
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nuclean
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nuclear
power
 in 2000. Speaking of
the
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Australia first, the same proportion can be seen
on
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for
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 natural
gas
 and
hydro
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hydropower
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power
 in 1980, at
exact
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 20. After 20 years, the natural
gas
 increased to 36 but the
hydro
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hydropower
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power
 got down to 2, which was the same amount
with
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as
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 oil. As for the
units
 of coal, there were 50
units
 used in1980 and experienced a dramatic change to 130 in 2000. When it comes to France,
the
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hydro
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hydropower
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power
 made up 5
units
 and 25
units
consumed
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were consumed
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on
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by
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 natural
gas
 in 1990 before both of them decreased to a mere(2). And
then
, the amount of coal did not change with the time. In terms of the oil, it grew from 20 to 25 during two decades. At
last
, more than 60%
nuclear
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power
 was used in 2020.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gas, power, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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