The charts show the sources of electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the sources of electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts compare the percentage of three different
electricity
sources produced in four major countries from 2003 to 2008. On the whole, it is evident that
while
Vietnam and
India
produced considerably higher
electricity
from fossil fuel,
Sweden
and Morocco appeared to harness
hydro power
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hydropower
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as their main
electricitysource
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electricity source
. Only
Indiaand Swedenhad electricityproduced
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India and Sweden have electricity produced
from nuclear energy. Among the four mentioned nations,
India
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electricity
depended mostly on fossil fuel, which accounted for over four-fifths. Meanwhile,
Sweden
and Morocco used only 4% and 5% of
this
source, respectively, for
electricity
production. Nuclear power,
however
, was exploited only in
India
and
Sweden
, which
consituted
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constituted
4% and 44%, respectively. Hydropower
used
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was used
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mainly in Morocco, which made up 95%, followed by
Sweden
, where over half of
electricity
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the electricity
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production was responsible
by
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for
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hydro power
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hydropower
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,
while
India
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India's
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electricity
production depended 14% on
this
source, which was the smallest figure compared to other nations.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, india, sweden with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity generation
  • Energy sources
  • Coal-powered
  • Natural gas
  • Nuclear energy
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Renewable resources
  • Energy mix
  • Clean energy
  • Sustainable practices
  • Trend analysis
  • Environmental impact
  • Energy transition
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Energy reliance
  • Energy portfolio
  • Year-over-year comparison
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