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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph depicts the results of a result that has been conducted in order to figure out the reason
of
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for
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people
's movement to the specific country's capital city between 2000 and 2015.
Overall
, the number of
people
 that moved to another country's capital for
studying
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study
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, gathering with
the
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apply
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family and adventure increased in the provided period. Meanwhile, moving for a career tended to have an incline in almost all of the years and declined in 2015. Based on the survey, employment took the main position
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as
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the reason why
community
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the community
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 moved until 2010. It was around 6000 workers moved in 2000,
then
 it hovered over the years and peaked in 2010 with around 9000 in figure. In 2015, the figure declined
along with
 the significant increase in folk who desired to study abroad.
This
 resulted in a condition that both
people
 who move for work and study have the same quantity. Moving the relatives and journey seemed to be insignificant in number. With a similar number at the beginning of the period, the percentage of
people
that
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apply
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moving for family and colleagues nearly doubled in
people
 inspired to move for adventure in 2015.
However
, both reasons are nothing
statistically
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statistical
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 in comparison with the two main motives: working and studying
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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