When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
There are different factors
people
consider when making a career move, and the size of the salary
is considered to be the most important one
. While
I agree that earning enough money is essential in order to lead a comfortable life
, I also
believe that job
satisfaction is of equal importance.
On the one
hand, people
need sufficient financial resources to address their fundamental needs which include food, housing, education, and clothing. If people
opted for low-paying jobs for some reason, they would probably be unable to fulfil such
necessities and therefore
put themselves and their family members in danger. For instance
, in a nuclear family, the parents might choose to work as part-time freelancers so that they spend more time with their children. As honourable as it may sound, such
a family might not be able to afford fresh fruits, which are highly nutritious and expensive, most of the time. They may also
be unable to send their children to good schools due to
high fees. This
will lead to the young ones suffering from not only malnutrition but also
poor education. Therefore
, many people
consider a high salary
to be the backbone of a balanced life
.
On the other hand
, a workplace with poor conditions or slim prospects for personal growth, I believe, will harm the workers as much as a low-paying career choice does even if there is a high salary
involved. For instance
, when a young and enthusiastic graduate joins a large firm in which the employees smear one
another to gain an advantage for a promotion, she might choose to hide her talents in hopes of not becoming a victim of someone’s lies. Eventually, despite earning a decent salary
, she will become clinically depressed due to
the frustration and stress that her job
causes. However
, if she chooses a job
with a decent salary
and a cooperative environment, she will not only live a stress-free life
but also
grow faster with all the help she receives from her colleagues. Hence
, job
satisfaction is also
needed for a healthy and fulfilling life
.
In conclusion, even though money is one
of the requirements of a decent lifestyle, in my opinion, people
should not sacrifice their mental health for it, and a job
should provide both a sufficient salary
and a friendly environment.Submitted by kenkin1122 on
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