You are applying to get admitted to an educational programme at a university abroad. Specify what you want to study and write a motivation letter, including the following points- •What attracted you to this particular programme, reason for wanting to study- your motivations and ambitions •How your current study is relevant and what your academic achievements are •Why you are suitable- extracurricular activities, hobbies and other experience related to your choice of programme.
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Dear
sir
, I am writing Capitalize word
Sir
this
letter to apply in
a Change preposition
for
Business
Management course
in Australia. I am so happy for joining
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to join
this
course
because I want to start my own business
in future and I want to gain more knowledge
about it. I have interest
in Correct article usage
an interest
business
and I love to study different strategies of business
or create new ideas in business
.
One of my friend
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friends
motivate
me to study abroad because they provide vast Wrong verb form
motivated
knowledge
of particular
field and they Correct article usage
a particular
also
organize practical sessions in which we have to work as intern
in companies which helps us to gain more Fix the agreement mistake
interns
knowledge
and experience which helps in increasing our confidence level. Even, my current study is also
related to this
course
as I am doing bachelor
of commerce which includes Correct article usage
a bachelor
complete
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the complete
knowledge
of business
, economics, accounting or
management activities. In Correct word choice
and
this
course
, I am only
scholar in my college with 95% marks Correct article usage
the only
along with
extracurricular activities such
as games, National service
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Service
international
quizzes.
My hobbies are exploring new Correct word choice
and international
business
ideas and read
books Wrong verb form
reading
of
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about
top class
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top-class
businessmen's
in the world, innovative in my tasks. I Change noun form
businessmen
also
have a experience as manager in ABC Ltd. Company which will be asset
for me in future.
Thank you
Your's sincerely
RohitAdd an article
an asset
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single aspect of your application, structuring them to separately address the programme's appeal, your academic background, and your extracurricular experiences.
coherence cohesion
While the overall structure of the letter is good, transitioning between ideas could be smoother. Use connecting phrases like 'furthermore', 'in addition to', and 'consequently' to link sentences and paragraphs more effectively.
task achievement
Expand on your motivations and ambitions with specific examples that demonstrate your interest and commitment to business management.
task achievement
Your academic achievements and extracurricular activities are mentioned but not detailed. Illustrate these with specific achievements, awards, or recognitions to strengthen your application.
task achievement
Consider adopting a more formal tone in places, avoiding informal language ('I am so happy for joining this course') for a more academic or professional tone that better fits the purpose of a motivation letter.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are suitable, but ensure the entire letter maintains a professional tone. Refrain from using contractions ('I am' instead of 'I'm', 'It is' instead of 'It's') throughout for consistency and formality.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.