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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts illustrate the proportion of
water
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 utilized for various aims in six continents of the world. It can be seen that agricultural use accounts for most of
countries
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the countries
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excepting
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 North America and Europe. The opposite is true for mentioned countries when regarding
of
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the percentage of
water
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 used for industrial purposes. The highest ratio of
water
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 use for
water
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 stands at a level of 88% in Central Asia,
while
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 the lowest figure is 39% in North America. Next to the
most
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second purpose, Europe has the highest amount of
water
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 used for industry, with 53%. So the figure for domestic use is very limited, with only 7% of
water
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is
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consumed in Central and South East Asia. In six selected countries, South America utilized
water
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 for domestic
purpose
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purposes
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the most.
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, it can be true that agriculture and industry are prioritized in all areas around the world,
while
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 domestic is less focused on.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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