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In many countries nowadays, more and more women have full-time jobs as men, so there is logic that men and women should share the housework tasks equally. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In many states right now, women participate in having
full time
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 jobs as men, which leads to them doing equal
work
in house
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. I strongly agree
to
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this
 argument as the
sterotype
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stereotype
 of men doing
full time
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work
 and women doing all the household
stivities
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activities
festivities
 does not exist anymore.
Also
, nowadays males are more efficient in doing
the
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home activities than females as they like doing
such
work
like
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 cooking, cleaning and
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 more stuff. My
further
 paragraphs
would
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 be based on
this
 reasoning.
Firstly
, it is seen that both genders have equal participation in the
work
.
This
 could be based on
rise
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the rise
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 in expenses
or
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their qualifications or any other factor. But
this
 has ended the stereotype of
male
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males
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 dominating the working and earning money for the family, simultaneously,
this
 should
also
 end
female
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females
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 taking care of their family by doing
home based
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home-based
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 activities. The result
being
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 the
work
 should be divided between spouses equally.
Secondly
, it has been seen nowadays that males are doing some home tasks more efficiently than females and are good at doing it. We see men becoming chefs, babysitters, tutors, cleaners and pretty much doing all the
works
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work
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 that
are
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 required for
maintaing
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maintaining
 a house.
For example
, Gordon Ramsay is a
well known
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 chef and is great at his occupation, it is obvious that he is the one who
also
 cooks and not his wife. So,
huband
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husband
 and wife should
seperate
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separate
 their tasks based on their expertise.
To conclude
this
, it would be logical to say that since, since, occupation is not dominated by gents anymore, ladies are
also
 earning money by working full-time and there is a mix of both being best in housework. My viewpoint supports that there should be equal division between them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • evolutionary shift
  • workforce participation
  • shared responsibilities
  • partnership model
  • connected relationships
  • domestic sphere
  • gender equality
  • role models
  • practical challenges
  • technological advancements
  • societal norms
  • distribution of chores
  • physical ability
  • personal preferences
  • alleviate the burden
  • dynamics
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