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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The graph shows the percentage of the
population
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 in the Philippines,
Malaysia
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, Thailand, and Indonesia between 1960 and 2020, with predictions from 2030 to 2040.
Overall
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, in the given period, most people live in
Malaysia
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, and the least people live in Thailand.
According to
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 the graph, there are about 40
percent
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 of people lived in
Malaysia
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 in 1980 which is the largest
population
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 living.
Then
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 the
population
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 living in
Malaysia
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 increased sharply to around 74
percent
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 in 2020.
Furthermore
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, there are predictions that the
population
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 living in
Malaysia
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 will be increased to about 80
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2024. Indonesia had the least
population
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 living in four Asian countries from 1970 to 2000. But it started increasing sharply and went to around 50
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2020, and
according to
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 the predictions it will be increased to about 60
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2040, be the second largest
population
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 living city.
On the other hand
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, Thailand and the Philippines'
population
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 living is decreasing.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, malaysia, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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