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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts show the average percentages of three types of nutrients in typical meals consumed in the USA.
Overall
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, in the given bar charts we can see that both
sodium
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 and saturated fat are consumed at dinner the most, and consumed at breakfast the least. Added sugar is consumed in
snacks
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 the most.
According to
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 the charts,
sodium
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 is consumed in 43
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percent
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per cent
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 of dinner, which is the most typical meal in
sodium
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.
Furthermore
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, there are 29
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percent
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per cent
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 of lunch is consumed in
sodium
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, and both
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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snacks
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 and breakfast consumed 14
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percent
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per cent
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 in
sodium
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. Saturated fat is consumed in 37
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percent
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per cent
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 of dinner.
On the other hand
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, there are 26
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percent
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per cent
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 of lunch, 21
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percent
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per cent
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 of
snacks
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, and 16
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percent
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per cent
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 of breakfast are consumed in saturated fat.
In contrast
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, there are 42
percent
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 of
snacks
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 are consumed with added sugar which is the most in three typical meals.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, snacks, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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