The line graph shows the price of banana in Japan, France, Germany, and the USA from 1994 to 2004.

The line graph shows the price of banana in Japan, France, Germany, and the USA from 1994 to 2004.
The line chart illustrates detailed data about how much money was spent on various countries
for
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per kilo in the space of a decade. ( 1994-2004) Units are measured in
dollar
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.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the price of bananas witnessed an increase in Japan
while
these figures for France and Germany declined slightly.
Moreover
, it is worth noting that the USA remained unchanged after rising insignificantly at the beginning of the period. In detail, it is evident that the most expensive price of bananas was 2.00
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in Japan at the initial point, afterwards there was experienced a
sharply
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growth just above to 3.00$ in 1995.
However
, it
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reverse
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in
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years
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and it decreased to just under
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2.00 $.
Furthermore
, it recorded 2.50 $ at the final of the time despite some fluctuations.
In contrast
, the total amount of bananas was just top and under 1.50 in France and Germany respectively.
This
tendency for France changed before plummeting to 1.00$ in 2000.
Following
this
, in 2003, there was observed a decline to nearly 0.50 and
then
again climbed to
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point in 2004. The trend for Germany was represented 1.50 $ in 1996, 1997, and 1999, afterwards, plunged to 1.00 dollar.
In particular
, the lowest cost of banana sales was roughly 0.60 $ in the USA in 1994 after going up to approximately 1.20 $
Last
but not least, it
shown
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stability to
end
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of the duration.
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