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The maps below show a beachfront area in Australia between 1950 and today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a beachfront area in Australia between 1950 and today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given maps illustrate the past form of beachfront
area
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areas
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 in Australia, and some changes from
past
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around 1950 until today. Looking into more details, they have tried to expand the main road
until
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to
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southeast
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the southeast
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. Developers not only have added
new
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a new
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 car park
instead
 of
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a privious
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privious
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previous
 playground, but they
also
 have expanded the northeast car park doubling its size. The maps
further
 reveal that in the southwest, builders have constructed new
restaurant
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restaurants
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,
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 and
little
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a little
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 surf club.
Additionally
, they have extended the size of
left
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the left
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 pool, because in the past it was 25
meter
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meters
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,
while
 nowadays it is 50
meter
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meters
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. Developers
,
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 have placed bigger light
house
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houses
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 in the southeast
instead
 of little
one
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ones
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. In today's map, it can be visible
,
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that, new
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new
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a new
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 surf club
also
have
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been
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 added near light
house
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greenhouse
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.
Overall
, there have been enormous changes in today's beachfront area, but developers did not change the dining tables, pavilion, and the size of
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the right
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right side
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right-side
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 pool.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, instead".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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