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The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015

The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015
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The provided bar chart compares the
proportion
 of females studying in higher education in The UK, The
USA
,
Australia
, South Korea and France in the period between 1980 and 2015. Generally speaking, the chart illustrates that the
proportion
 of
women
 went up gradually in 2015 in almost all countries, except for
Australia
, where the figure remained unchanged.
According to
 the data, the percentage of
USA
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 was the same as
Australia
 totaled almost
three fifth
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, and
this
percent
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 was the highest in 2015. Unlike the trend for The
USA
 and
Australia
, the trend for
UK
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the UK
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 had a minimal difference of approximately 5 % in the same year.
However
, there were just over
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half the
proportion
 of
women
 students in France. The figure for South Korea reached the lowest point
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30% in 2015.
On the other hand
, the percentage of Australian female school-leavers peaked at almost 60% in 1980. Around 38% of
women
 from The
USA
 attended universities in 1980, compared to approximately 35% of
women
 from the UK.
Additionally
, the figure for France rose slightly to
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half in the same period. Meanwhile, the
proportion
 of female graduates in South Korea had the lowest contribution with less than a fifth in both years .
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