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You have seen an advertisement for part-time job at a restaurant and want to apply for it. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter: -describe your experience -tell him why you are interested in the job -say why you think you would be suitable for the job

#advertisement #job #restaurant #manager #-describe #-tell #-say
Dear Sir or Madam, The reason why I am addressing you is that
l
 want to appeal for them which you try to find employee part-time jobs at your
restourant
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restaurant
. When it comes to my relevant experience,
l
 began
to
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in
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 several positions
since
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when
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l
 was turning fifteen years old. At first ,
l
 worked washing the dishes in the cousin.Even if ,
l
 worked as
chef
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a chef
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whereas
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apply
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l
 learnt culinary arts,
hospitally
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hospitality
skill
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skills
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, excellent customer service and others. I achieve everything by my stamina. I
have
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apply
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suddenly
seen
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saw
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 enthusiastic
application
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applications
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 on my laptop later
then
 I
think
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over
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about
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 the
part -time
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part-time
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 post .
l
 am searching suitable job for me
thus
l
 studying evening
class
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classes
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.
l
 hard attention to detail of the situation and it
including of
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 affordable features for me .
To sum up
 ,
l
 believe in you to allow for my experience and employ the occupation to me. Yours faithfully, Khayitova Gulbahor
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Grammar and Clarity
Make sure to proofread your letter for minor grammatical errors and to ensure clarity in your sentences.
Organization
Consider organizing your experiences and reasons for applying more clearly to enhance understandability.
Content
To strengthen your application, explicitly mention how your skills and experiences make you a perfect candidate for the job.
Motivation
Your enthusiasm for the job opportunity and clear interest in working part-time are well communicated.
Closing
Ending the letter with a polite note of expectation for a positive response shows good manners and professionalism.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • enthusiastic application
  • hospitality sector
  • culinary arts
  • reliability
  • work under pressure
  • excellent customer service
  • flexibility in working hours
  • eagerness
  • part-time position
  • relevant experience
  • team player
  • communication skills
  • attention to detail
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