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Some people think it's better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe it is good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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matching beliefs or who sometimes do not see eye to eye with them is the topic to discuss. Personally, each side has its own pros. In the next paragraph, I will clarify them. On the one hand, it is true to say that bosom friends can strengthen friendship
as well as
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 the sympathetic to easily share with partners about their secrets.
For example
, if folks have crushed on someone, they will tell you the first.
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various aspects
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 life owing to. In terms of ideas, when
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individuals
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 mindset will make the analysis not get in trouble and
also
 time-saving for that process.
On the other hand
,
it is clear that
 mates who occasionally differ from their perspectives bring citizens maturing and more understanding. Regarding maturing, they may help you explore,
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 new perspectives.
As a result
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. Another benefit is about understanding, after those struggle conflicts, they will find
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reasonable resolutions and
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bad. In conclusion, how to find
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 depends on each person.
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lifestyle
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coherence cohesion
For a higher score, your essay should be well-structured, dividing clearly into paragraphs each addressing a single main idea. Consider using more transitions to guide the reader through your argument.
coherence cohesion
Expand on your examples to better support your points. Try to provide more detailed examples and explain how they relate to your argument to enhance clarity and depth.
task achievement
To improve your task achievement score, try to fully answer all parts of the question. This includes discussing both views equally and providing your own opinion with clear reasons and examples.
task achievement
Enhance the clarity and comprehensiveness of your ideas by elaborating on them with more detailed reasoning and appropriate examples. Make sure each paragraph contributes to your overall argument.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bond
  • support
  • unconditional love
  • shared values
  • mutual understanding
  • trust
  • emotional well-being
  • interdependence
  • societal norms
  • companionship
  • loyalty
  • advice
  • experiences
  • mentorship
  • trustworthy
  • reliable
  • reliable
  • cherish
  • strengthen
  • deepen
  • attach importance to
  • prioritize
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