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The graph represents the levels of production for primary fuels in a European nation from the year 1981 to 2000.

The graph represents the levels of production for primary fuels in a European nation from the year 1981 to 2000.
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The figure illustrates trends of different
fuel
 productions in a European Nation between 1981 and 2000. The data shows that
fuel
production
 from
Petroleum
 has been fluctuating during the period.
Nevertheless
, it has always produced more
fuel
 compared to other materials.
On the other hand
, the chart indicates that Natural
Gas
 has caught up to Coal's level of
production
 in 1997. It has always produced more fuels in the future years too. It is not surprising as Coal
production
 has been in constant decline since 1987.
On the contrary
, Natural
Gas
production
 was stagnant until around the 90s,
then
 a slight increase year by year was experienced. Another point worth mentioning is the
production
 level for
Petroleum
 rarely falls below 100 marks.
According to
 the chart, both Coal and Natural
Gas
 have never produced that much
fuel
 even once. To summarize, the biggest primary
fuel
production
 in a European Country
have
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 always
came
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 from
Petroleum
.
Eventhough
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Even though
Coal
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the Coal
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production
 level was below
Petroleum
at
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in
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 the 80s, Natural
Gas
have
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 been producing more
fuel
.
Consequently
, the second biggest contributor of
fuel
 in 2000 was Natural
Gas
, followed by Coal.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fuel, production, petroleum, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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