Many doctors are concerned about the high use of computer games by children and young people. What mental and physical problems may arise from excessive use of these games? How could these problems be reduced?

Many health practitioners warn young people and adolescents about
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dependance
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dependence
to
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video
games
because too much consumption of video
games
may cause impulsivity and poor
posture
. In order to solve
this
issues
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, young ones can try to play cosier
games
and move their body
while
playing
games
. Medical concerns about playing too
much
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violent
games
by young ones can build an
agressive
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aggressive
behaviour pattern
to
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gamers
. Video
games
usually contain
high
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level
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levels
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of
violance
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violence
and
therefore
can lower
nerve
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tolarance
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tolerance
of the
gamers
. Some of them may become less aware or tolerant
to
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the events in real life,
such
as they may not react patiently and in an easy-going way and can express their emotions in
a
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unpleasant way.
In addition
to that, gaming for
hours
can cause a permanent bad
posture
because
while
we play, we usually bend and remain
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same position for
hours
without even noticing it and
this
causes back pain and irreversable bone
posture
develoption
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development
, especially for children. Take one of the most famous e-sports players, Faker,
for example
, he has already lost 2 cm of bone
lenght
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length
he originally had because of the
hours
he spent on gaming. The second problem can be solved by reducing the screen time individuals spend time in gaming. The real reason
behind
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why
gamers
have bad postures is maintaining the same bad position for
hours
and
as a result
, our body adapts to that
posture
and our bodies end up staying like that even at the times we do not play. The first problem can be partly solved by playing cosier alternatives because they do not trigger
the
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violent behaviours.
According to
Steam Gamer's
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research
survey,
for instance
, many felt significantly calmer when they switched from action
games
to cosy ones.
To conclude
, to solve and prevent the bad causes of teenager's dependence on
games
we can encourage children to play
games
that are gentle to their
nerve
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system, and for the second cause, we can warn
gamers
about the necessity of moving their
body
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once in a
while
.
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