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The given table shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005

The given table shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005
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The table demonstrates the partition of fuel consumption between Malaysia, Singapore, Thailand, South Korea and Japan. It is evident from the data that
a
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nuclear
energy
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 was one of the most preferable for almost every country. It is interesting to note that Malaysian
energy
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for
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61%
generated
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 by
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coal and lignite,
that
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 was the only country that
relyed
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to
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the
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one source of
energy
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 for more than
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half. As
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Malaysia
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 Singapore
also
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prefered
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preferred
 coal and lignite,
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however
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 they consumed
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approximately 20% less of the fuel and
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 used other types of resources. Thailand is the only country that had no consumption of
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nuclear
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.
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, they
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 remarkable by the fact of
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petroleum products usage, because all other countries have small fractions of
energy
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 that
generated
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 by
this
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 way. South Korea mostly
generated
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electicity
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electricity
 from
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renewable
energy
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 sources like
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nuclear or hydro and wind. Japan took the leading position in
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nuclear
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 consumption, 49% of
electicity
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electricity
 produced in 2005 was nuclear.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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