The table shows the proportion of people in England who agree with same-sex marriage from 1989 to 2013.. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the proportion of people in England who agree with same-sex marriage from 1989 to 2013..

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given table illustrates how many
percentage
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percentages
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of people agreeing with
same-sex
marriage
by
five
religious
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denominations
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denomination
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denominations
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in different
five
years from 1989 to 2013.
Overall
, there
were
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was
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a gradual growth
on
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in
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the
same-sex
marriage
agreements during the given period of time. People who claim they have no religion had the highest ratios among the
five
groups
,
while
those who were
Non-Christian
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non-Christian
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made up the
least
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lowest
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percentage compared to other
groups
.
According to
the graph,
percentage
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the percentage
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of supporting
same-sex
marriage
in 2007
were
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was
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between 19% and 64 %, which increased almost four times as much as that in 1989, which from 5% to 20%.
In addition
, no religion showed the highest proportion with 20% in 1989 among the
five
groups
,
while
other
groups
just accounted
from
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for
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5% to 9% in the same year. Moving on to 2013, the number of approving
same-sex
marriage
experienced a continuous upward trend, and over half of people in all
groups
except for
Non-Christian
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non-Christians
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supported
same-sex
marriage
in 2013.
Furthermore
, the proportion of no religion rose to 77% in 2013, which was more than twice as much as that in
Non-Christian
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non-Christians
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with 30%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words same-sex, marriage, five, groups with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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