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The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income of five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income of five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The table compares the allocation of monthly household earnings across four categories of expenditure :
food
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 and
drink
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, housing, clothing, and
entertainment
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, specifically in the European
countries
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.
Overall
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, most
countries
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 spend the household income on accommodation fees, except in
Turkey
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 and
Spain
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 where the allocation for
food
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 and
drink
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 is the highest.
Whereas
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, the least expenditure goes on clothing except in
Turkey
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. In more detail explanation, the expenditure on housing in France, Germany, and the United Kingdom is mostly above 30% of the household income, followed by
Turkey
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 and
Spain
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 at relatively 20% and 18%.
On the contrary
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, the figure states that
Turkey
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 and
Spain
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 spend 36% of
earnings
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their earnings
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 on
food
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 and
drink
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, considered the highest percentage among the other
countries
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. Meanwhile, the remaining
countries
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 set
food
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 and
drink
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 as the second priority at below 30%. As regards
entertainment
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 and clothing, France, Germany, and
Spain
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 allocate a higher proportion for
entertainment
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 than clothing in the range of 13 - 19% and make clothing their least priority. In comparison, clothing (12%) is much more important than
entertainment
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 (10%) for
Turkey
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, meanwhile, it is noteworthy that the United Kingdom distributes their income equally for the remaining category.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, drink, entertainment, countries, turkey, spain with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • allocate
  • proportion
  • expenditure
  • speculate
  • real estate
  • average income
  • trends
  • significant differences
  • lifestyle
  • surprising findings
  • notable patterns
  • economic priorities
  • living standards
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