The diagram below shows the process of using water to produce electricity.

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The illustration displays the hydro-electric power process.

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, the

hydro-eletric

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hydroelectric

power relies on fresh

water

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only. The

recycle

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recycling

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water

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is essential to the process.

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Also

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it is

improtant

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important

to build

the

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dam

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in order to store enough amount of

water

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in the reservoir for the whole process. Fresh

water

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comes from the rain. The

sea

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seawater

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water

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evaporates

due to

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the heat from the sun, leaving the salt behind.

First

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the

rain

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rainwater

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water

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is collected in the reservoir built at the side of the mountain, using

this

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location to help the flow of

water

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. On the other side of the

damn

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there is a valve which is

use

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used

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controlled

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control

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the

water

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in the

dam

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to flow in the system by the time they open it. Fresh

water

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from the

dam

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will be sent to the turbine first to create the

movementum

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movement

momentum

of the

chrage

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charge

and

then

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converted

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apply

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into electricity. The electricity will

tranfer

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transfer

along the high voltage cables to the transformer station. The transformer will

sent

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send

be sent

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the electricity to

school

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schools

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hospital

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hospitals

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and for household usage through the underground cables. The

water

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in the turbine , after it already

produce

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produces

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energy, will be sent to the pump to pump it back to the

dam

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, dam with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

205 words

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The diagram below shows the process of using water to produce electricity.

Some people think that it is fine for professional sportsmen and sportswomen to misbehave on or off the field, as long as they are playing well. Others think that they should act politely in all circumstances. Discuss both sides of the argument and give your opinion.

(VMN-Fixed)Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems such as railway and trams. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages or disadvantages of this trend?

Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?