Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others beliece it is more important to give their time and attentiion to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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subjects

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are sometimes interesting for some

students

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in a university. Some of them are thinking the other

way

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to spend their time

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completing

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qualification

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courses or tests. In my opinion, those two ways of studying in university are both great as long as they use their time optimally for their growth,

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they have different

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of benefits and drawbacks for the

students

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, the first one is good if the

students

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find an intriguing subject that

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their passion. They will have more motivation

studying

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that subject and refresh their minds from other main

subjects

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that are relatively tough for them. They

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will have a more broad knowledge of various

subjects

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that they cannot gain in their main

subjects

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. I

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the oceanography major in

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college and mainly I studied

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physical oceanography, but I

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took a subject

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fisheries to gain more knowledge about fish, how to catch them, and their markets in Indonesia. It was definitely fun to take a

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off the confusing equations from oceanography and I have a

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understanding of how

fisheries

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sector works in Indonesia.

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speaking, it may

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or may not be significant for the future career that the student will take. Equally important, the second choice proposed

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for the

students

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that have a clearer vision of their career. A

qualification

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means that they are formally capable of doing something, proved by an official certificate from an official organization.

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qualification

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is very valuable in applying for a job. The company that they have been submitting

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will notice that they are more qualified for the vacant position compared to

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another candidate

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without a

qualification

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certificate.

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, if a student wants to be a manager in survey works, it would be good if they have a certificate in leading a project. They will be an expert in what they can but

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they will have a fewer knowledge of various

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other than their speciality. To sum it up, both options are good for a student in their university. Those options are obviously a lot better

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doing nothing in their free time. With the discussed pros and cons for them, I hope anyone that reads

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can choose better their future.

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task achievement

Be sure to fully address the task prompt by clearly stating your opinion in the introduction and reiterating it in the conclusion for a stronger argument structure.

coherence cohesion

Enhance your introduction and conclusion to better signal the beginning and end of your essay, providing a clearer structure and making it easier for the reader to follow.

task achievement

Develop your main points with more specific examples or data to strengthen your arguments and make them more persuasive.

coherence cohesion

To improve logical flow, try using a wider range of linking words and phrases that expressly indicate contrast, comparison, cause and effect, etc., between paragraphs and within them.

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Consider revising for a more formal tone by avoiding colloquial expressions and generalizations, making your essay more academically appropriate.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

387 words

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