The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The given bar graph illustrates the methods of weekly family income expenditure in a nation over the
year
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1968 and 2018.
Overall
, the
expences'
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over
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food , leisure and housing had reported far more than other aspects
such
as fuel, clothing and footwear, household
goods
, personal
goods
and transport. In detail, in 1968 substantially higher amount
had
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paid for food compared to
it
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in 2018, and it's the highest percentage that had been spent for one method in
whole
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study, 35% from weekly income.
However
, in both years fuel and power posted the
least
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values of nearly 6% in 1968 and almost 4% in 2018.
Furthermore
, as same
as
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in 1968 as in 2018 approximately 8 % paid off for household
goods
,and
in addition
this
percentage was same for the personal
goods
and transport in 1968.
Otherthan
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Other than
that, the expenditure on
lesuire
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leisure
activities was shown a marked
diffrence
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difference
between
the
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1968 and 2018 with almost 21% far more
in
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later.
However
,
this
was comparatively far less than the
oppesite
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opposite
gap
on
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in
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food between the
year
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years
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1968 and 2018,
whic
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which
was approximately 33% .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words goods with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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