The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The given bar graph illustrates the methods of weekly family income expenditure in a nation over the
year
1968 and 2018.
Fix the agreement mistake
years
Overall
, the expences'
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expences
over
food , leisure and housing had reported far more than other aspects Change preposition
on
such
as fuel, clothing and footwear, household goods
, personal goods
and transport.
In detail, in 1968 substantially higher amount had
paid for food compared to Verb problem
was
it
in 2018, and it's the highest percentage that had been spent for one method in Correct pronoun usage
apply
whole
study, 35% from weekly income. Change the article
the whole
However
, in both years fuel and power posted the least
values of nearly 6% in 1968 and almost 4% in 2018.
Correct word choice
lowest
Furthermore
, as same as
in 1968 as in 2018 approximately 8 % paid off for household Change preposition
apply
goods
,and in addition
this
percentage was same for the personal goods
and transport in 1968.
Otherthan
that, the expenditure on Correct your spelling
Other than
lesuire
activities was shown a marked Correct your spelling
leisure
diffrence
between Correct your spelling
difference
the
1968 and 2018 with almost 21% far more Correct article usage
apply
in
later. Change preposition
apply
However
, this
was comparatively far less than the oppesite
gap Correct your spelling
opposite
on
food between the Change preposition
in
year
1968 and 2018, Fix the agreement mistake
years
whic
was approximately 33% .Correct your spelling
which
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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