You use the local swimming pool often and during one of your visits you have encountered a problem. Write a letter to the manager and say – What the problem was and when it happened – What the swimming pool staff have done about it – Suggest your own solution to the problem.
Dear Sir,
I am writing
this
letter to complain about your local swimming Linking Words
pool
during my Use synonyms
last
visit. I must Linking Words
to
admit that the Change the verb form
apply
pool
is Use synonyms
vere
well but you have a situation that requires a solution which encountered me.
Correct your spelling
very
Children
come to your big adult hall, I certainly wouldn't mind but it would be better if they Use synonyms
swimming
in their little Wrong verb form
swam
Use synonyms
children
Change noun form
children's
pool
.
I Use synonyms
am
Unnecessary verb
apply
also
want to say it would be better if we glue the sign that Linking Words
children
under 10 years entrance is forbidden. It Use synonyms
is
would be better not only for me but Unnecessary verb
apply
also
for other people. Linking Words
For
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instance
it is Add a comma
instance,
also
would be better for a Linking Words
Use synonyms
children
life Change noun form
child's
due to
they are still small and can't Linking Words
swimming
.
Change the form of the verb
swim
Consequently
, I know that Linking Words
the
you have a Remove the article
apply
pool
for Use synonyms
children
, please let Use synonyms
for
them Change preposition
apply
swimming
there. It would be good if you organized it tomorrow because the faster the better.
Thanks for all,
Tour faithful,
With love Bakhshandabonu.Wrong verb form
swim
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Task Response
Focus on explaining the problem more clearly at the beginning. Instead of 'encountered me', say 'I encountered'. Ensure the problem is described in detail right from the start.
Coherence & Cohesion
Organize your ideas more clearly. Each paragraph should introduce and expand upon a single idea. The transition between stating the problem, suggesting a solution, and expressing urgency could be smoother.
Vocabulary
Use more appropriate and formal vocabulary, especially when proposing solutions. Avoid colloquial expressions like 'glue the sign' and use 'affix a sign' or 'put up a sign' instead.
Grammar
Ensure correct grammar usage for more effective communication. For example, 'I am also want to say' should be 'I also want to say', and be mindful of verb forms and agreements throughout.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,