Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today ‘s world subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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In
this
World, Some groups of people
told
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the
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society
History
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that History
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subjects
is
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are
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more Crucial.
On the other hand
, some
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that Subjects like modern days.Instance,Science and Technology
is
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most Important. In
this
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I will discuss both
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and give my opinion.
Firstly
, There are People who think that
History
Books are More useful in
society
rather than others. I think they say
this
because,
History
is the most important factor in any Thing because without
history
we cannot understand
that
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,
from
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where
this
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to
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and what the purpose of
this
and
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why
this
is Happening. Without
history
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history,
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everything becomes so
counfusing
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confusing
.
For Example
,
First
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phone was invented by Graham Bell, how
we
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do we
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know that, Because of
history
Books without that we
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never be able to find who is the first creator of
Phone
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the Phone
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.
In Addition
,
History
also
told
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us about
humans
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human
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Revolutions and past Incidents,
Researches
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Research
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, Wars, Problems etc.
Secondly
,Groups of people Belong to their words. (Modern subjects like Science and Technology) is More Competitive and we Should
thaught
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thought
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about them it is more Important. They think that
history
is just
waste
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a waste
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of time and Our whole Focus
would be
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on
Latest
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the Latest
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Things So We should Adapt that and Grow with
Whole
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the Whole
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World. Because
this
Globe is Changing rapidly fast And Aquire more Passion and Dedication to compete with World.
For Instance
, If we told our
society
about
history
and anything like that it would be lost in Past and the Entire Globe Become so fast in Modern and
latest
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the latest
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Technology that We
cannot
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chase him and we become
A Underdeveloped
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an underdeveloped
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country in
thier
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their
eyes. In my
Opinion
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opinion
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, We should
thaught
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teach
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our
society
about
History
as well as
Modern Technologies so that they
known
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the background and Fully Understand it and Can make more and rapid Progress in
this
Globe
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coherence cohesion
Consider organizing your essay more effectively by clearly introducing the topic and stating your opinion in the introduction. Make sure your conclusion summarizes your points and reiterates your stance clearly.
coherence cohesion
Improve coherence by using clear and logical connectors between sentences and paragraphs. This will help your essay flow more smoothly and make it easier for the reader to follow your argument.
task achievement
Address the task more completely by discussing both sides of the argument in equal measure and providing a balanced overview before stating your opinion. Ensure that your opinion is clear and directly addresses the prompt.
task achievement
Use more relevant and specific examples to support your points. The examples you choose should be directly linked to the argument you're making and clearly illustrate your point. Consider using examples from recent developments in science and technology to counterbalance historical examples.
coherence cohesion
Work on the structure of your sentences and the accuracy of language use. Avoid run-on sentences and strive for clarity and conciseness in your expression. Consider grammar and vocabulary improvements to make your argument more persuasive.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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