The map below shows the development of the town of Stromer between 1995 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the town of Stromer between 1995 and now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The map presents how a
town
named Stromer was in 1995 and how it is today. Dramatic changes took place in the Stromer, the
area
now has more shopping places and residential buildings. Over the period, the
town
has been completely transformed,
this
dramatic structuring has
been
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changed the
town
from a natural field to a modernised location. An education building was demolished at the
center
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of the
town
and
in addition
to the old one, five new shops opened the
area
around it by chopping down the trees in that
area
. Six new apartment buildings have been
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constructed
to the north and south sides of the shops. The
area
used for farming has been reduced significantly and a new house has been built on it.
Additionally
, the forest located to the north-east part of the
town
cut
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down partially, and a new airport and
and
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the
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two of the new six apartments have been replaced by it. The
town
now has less
area
for plants and agriculture.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town, area with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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