The table below illustrates information about age, average income of a person and population that is below the poverty line in California, Utal, and Florida.
The table compares age, average
of
per individual’s salary, and Change preposition
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population
poverty in three states in the US.
Overall
, what stands out from the table is that the most average income is in California
. Most teenagers prefer to live in Utah
, while
in Florida
, there is the largest proportion of elderly people
. Another interesting point is that the biggest difference is
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Florida
and Utah
for elderly people
living
.
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Utah
, it represent the largest percentage of the
young individuals, at 28%, Correct article usage
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while
elderly people
have the lowest figure, at 8%. The proportion of young humans who live in California
and Florida
is almost equally
accounting for almost 17%. Elderly Change the word
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people
who live in Florida
contribute 23%, while
those in California
contribute 13% to data
.
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the data
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salary is Add an article
the average
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California
and Florida
population
, at 23000 and 22000 dollars respectively, Fix the agreement mistake
populations
as well as
the poorest individuals live
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living
California
and Florida
, at merely over 15% and less than 15% in turn. The remaining population
constitutes a tenth of the total population
according to
Utah
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