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The illustrations below show how chocolate is produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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diagrams below depict the techniques employed in the extraction of fresh chocolate.
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 10-stage process entails the fermentation of ripe cocoa beans that will be roasted once dried in order to have the liquid chocolate pressed out. The growing of the cacao tree in ideal regions
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 as South America, Africa or Indonesia is a logical starting point. Once the pods have become ripe, it will facilitate the harvesting in which white cocoa beans will be skillfully removed from each pod to be left to ferment for a period, and
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 dried out under the sun for another length of time. After the beans have been dried sufficiently, they will be transferred in sacks via trains or lorries to a specialized factory
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 the roasting phase using a temperature of 350 degrees Celcius.
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, the outer shell will be removed by means of a crushing mechanism, allowing for the inner part to be pressed using rollers and the release of liquified chocolate.
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Supporting Details
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Relevance to Task
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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