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Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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There are university
students
 who support the idea of adding extra
subjects
,
while
 others prefer focusing only on the qualifications necessary for their work. Both viewpoints may affect you in different ways and in
this
 essay I will share my opinion describing their benefits and drawbacks.
Firstly
,there are several universities in the world that have different ways of studying. Some universities have already thought over their educational system. They don’t allow learn new
subjects
 to
students
 other than the main ones.
However
,some teachers permit
students
 to learn new
subjects
such
 as art or literature to improve their knowledge and skills.
As a result
,it can really have a positive impact on
students
' future.
On the other hand
,I think that universities should definitely allow
students
 to learn more. If you want to be successful, you don't have to know all
subjects
, but learning new
subjects
 is
also
 good and you can improve your knowledge.
For example
, if some
students
 focus only on their main field, they probably will not have a good quality of education. So,teachers should encourage
students
 and support them in developing their careers by taking additional courses. In conclusion, it depends on the university educational system.
However
,they
also
 should permit
students
 to learn new
subjects
 to improve their skills and I believe
this
 will be beneficial to a certain degree in the future.
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Introduction
Make sure your essay introduction clearly states the topic and your viewpoint. Although your introduction provided a brief overview, directly stating your stance would make it stronger.
Logical Structure
Use a range of linking words and organize ideas logically. While you attempted to create logical connections, enhancing the flow with more varied connectors would improve coherence.
Supported Main Points
Develop your paragraphs fully with specific examples. Your essay would benefit from more detailed examples to support the main points.
Conclusion
Ensure your conclusion effectively summarizes both views and clearly restates your opinion. While your conclusion touched upon key points, a more conclusive statement of your stance would be beneficial.
Clear Comprehensive Ideas
Clarify and develop your ideas further. Some points were mentioned briefly but lacked depth. Expanding on these ideas with more detail and explanation can make your argument more persuasive.
Relevant Specific Examples
Incorporate specific and relevant examples to strengthen your argument. While there were attempts to provide examples, more concrete and detailed examples would enhance your task achievement score.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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  • Academic credibility
  • Recognition
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