The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph demonstrates what
anthropologiest
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anthropologist
anthropologists
do after getting
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their
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bachelor's
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degree
,
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the table contains
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statistics
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about
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average income after 5 years of employment as an anthropologist. It is evident from the data that more than
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half of
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graduates
find
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full time
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work,
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after 5 years of working
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80% of
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anthropologist
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in freelance and
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government
have salaries over 75 000$, and 55% in
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sectore
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sector
sectors
also
have income over 75000$.
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level of employment among newly graduated specialists. 80% of graduates have a
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or
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job.
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, 13% of them even
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combining
working and studying in
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a master
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master
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programm
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program
. It is
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interesting
to note that just 12% of
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professionals
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don't
have a job position. It is noticeable that
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the most financially beneficial sphere for anthropology
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is
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goverment
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sector,
hence
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average
50% of them have salaries over 100000$,
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those who
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in
private
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the private
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sector have
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income in 30% of cases. Freelance employees have almost similar career
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as
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government
ones,
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of highly paid workers is
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10% less.
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