The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the
process
by which bricks
are made for the building industry. Overall
, there are seven steps in the process
, starting with the digging up of clay
and culminating in delivery.
First of all, the clay
which is made of bricks
is dug up by a big digger. This
clay
is then
placed into a metal grid that is
used to break the clay
into many small pieces by a roller. In the subsequent stage, sand and water are added to the clay
. This
mixture is placed into a mould as a wire cutter. After that, these bricks
are put in an oven to dry for 24-48 hours.
Following
this
, the bricks
go through some process
. They are heated in a kiln at a moderate and high temperature. Next,
the cooling process
happens in a chamber for 48-72 hours. Finally
, the bricks
are packed and delivered to their destinations.Submitted by writingbhos on
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