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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart provides information about estimated world
illiteracy
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 rates by country and by gender for the
last
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 year.
Overall
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, from the bar chart, throughout the
regions
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regions,
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 female
illiteracy
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rate
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 was leading and even increasing, but
male
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the male
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rate
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 did not overcome the female
rate
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 even increased.
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, In the
last
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 year, In all regions,
female
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the female
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illiteracy
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rate
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 was leading in South Asia with 55% of all
female
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females
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do
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apply
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not
know
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knowing
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 words and alphabets.
Firstly
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, There were 3 regions which have a lot more people who do not know words, which are South Asia, Arab States and Sub-Saharan Africa.
The
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 3 leading
countries
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 50% of all women are
illiteracy
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, and
men
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 are 30% of all
men
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.
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, The 3 least country
which
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with
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 have
low
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lowest
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rate
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rates
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 of
illiteracy
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 are developed
countries
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, Latin
American
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America
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 and East Asia, These 3
countries
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men
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 and female
illiteracy
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rate
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rates
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 are below 20%. Especially
developed
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in developed
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countries
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which
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where
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 the
rate
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 of
men
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 and female
are
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is
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 below 2%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "firstly, last".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy, rate, countries, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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