The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given chart provides information about estimated world
illiteracy
rates by country and by gender for the last
year.
Overall
, from the bar chart, throughout the regions
female Add a comma
regions,
illiteracy
rate
was leading and even increasing, but male
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the male
rate
did not overcome the female rate
even increased.
Firstly
, In the last
year, In all regions, female
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the female
illiteracy
rate
was leading in South Asia with 55% of all female
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females
do
not Verb problem
apply
know
words and alphabets.
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knowing
Firstly
, There were 3 regions which have a lot more people who do not know words, which are South Asia, Arab States and Sub-Saharan Africa. The
3 leading Change preposition
In the
countries
50% of all women are illiteracy
, and men
are 30% of all men
.
Secondly
, The 3 least country which
have Correct your spelling
with
low
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lowest
rate
of Fix the agreement mistake
rates
illiteracy
are developed countries
, Latin American
and East Asia, These 3 Replace the word
America
countries
men
and female illiteracy
rate
are below 20%. Especially Fix the agreement mistake
rates
developed
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in developed
countries
which
the Correct word choice
where
rate
of men
and female are
below 2%.Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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