The two pie charts provide information about boys and girls’ participation rates in various activities after the survey.

The two pie charts provide information about boys and girls’ participation rates in various activities after the survey.
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The provided pie chart shows the survey between males and females's focusing rates in the different classes. The data given in percantages and it can be split into two groups, huge and large proportions.
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, it is obvious to see that most of the boys were interested in playing computer games,
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girls had the highest among of dancing. First of all, there are a variety of types of activities for students, The number of playing electric games was the highest at 34%.
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, the second largest amount of
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participation was Basketball, which is less than a computer game only 8%.
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soccer, skateboarding, and listening to music were in the similar range, roughly 10%-20%. Meanwhile, the figure witnessed the lowest amount of interest at 2%, which is the reading.
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, turning to the girls' culture of activities. Dancing and Reading accounted for 21% to 27%.
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, females spent their leisure time quite a lot on netball and computer games around 15%-16%.
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the least of things that women would like to spend their free time with was gymnastics and listening to music, above more than 10%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rates
  • survey
  • comparison
  • popularity
  • activities
  • gender-specific
  • predominantly
  • societal factors
  • psychological factors
  • development
  • teamwork
  • physical health
  • cognitive skills
  • educational policies
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