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You have arranged to visit a friend in england but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit

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Dr. Jane Hope you are doing well. I'm writing
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 apology letter about changing
date
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the date
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 of the day I want to visit your home. It is widely recognized there is a significant reason why it was
occured
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occurred
 an
unexceptable
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unacceptable
 important event in my house. Suddenly, my grandmother passed away because of her
ill
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. I like my grandmother very much.
Therefore
, my family and
me
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 are deeply saddened now. There is a considerably profound apology from you as I made you be inconvenient condition which I could not control and was not related to me. I would like to give my sincere apologies to you and I hope that you will accept my apology. If you have the chance, I will want to change
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 date of your home visit. Namely, you should create a new arrangement. Thank you for considering my request. I am looking forward to replying to you soon. Yours sincerely, Anne Frank
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structure
Consider adding a clear introduction, body, and conclusion to your letter to improve its structure. This will help the reader understand the main points more easily.
cohesion
Ensure the letter flows well by using linking words and phrases. This could include transitions between paragraphs and sentences that help guide the reader through your points.
task achievement
For a higher score in task achievement, make sure to address all parts of the prompt completely. Clearly state the situation, explain the importance of the change, offer a sincere apology, and propose a new date for the visit.
clarity
Improve clarity by using simpler, more accurate language. Avoid over-complication and strive for precision in your descriptions and apologies.
examples
Adding more specific examples, such as the date you were planning to visit and the new proposed date, can make your letter more comprehensive and relevant.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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