The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
The Diagram illustrates
Proportion
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the Proportion
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of
Water
Consumption
at
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in
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Six Places in The Globe for
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a Different
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kind
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kinds
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of
Usage
.
Overall
, Agricultural Places
takes
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take
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the first spot on
list
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the list
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for most
water
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Axcept
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Except
One Place (
Euorpe
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Europe
).
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,
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the Domestic
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Area
Is
Lowest
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the Lowest
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in
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the
list
. Every place in the
list
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water
for their
Agriculture
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agricultural
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Area Except
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areas except
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One
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apply
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Euorpe
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Europe
.They
use
more
Water
in Industrial
area
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areas
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rather than in
agriculture
with the number of 53%in Industrial
use
and 32% in
Agriculture
.
On the other hand
, Central
asia
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Asia
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takes the first spot on the
list
for using more
water
in
Agricultural
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the Agricultural
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area
With
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ratio of 88% in
Agriculture
and just 5% in
industrial
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an industrial
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area
which is the lowest ratio for
water
uasge
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usage
in
industrial
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an industrial
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area
.
In addition
, Africa and Southasia
Is
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back
in
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on
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the
list
with
the
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apply
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percentage
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percentages
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of 84% and 81% in
agriculture
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agricultural
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usage
and just 7% and
12%in
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12% in
industrial
use
.
Furthermore
, North America is in
second
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spot for using most
water
in industrial
area
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areas
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with
the
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a
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ratio
46
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of 46
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%.
Most
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The most
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less
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apply
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water
usage
in domestic is
Central
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in Central
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Asia and south
east asia
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Southeast Asia
with
the
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number of 7,7
percentage
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per cent
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respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, usage, list, area, use, agriculture with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
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