The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
The Diagram illustrates
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water
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Europe
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Europe
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more Water
in Industrial area
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areas
agriculture
with the number of 53%in Industrial use
and 32% in Agriculture
. On the other hand
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the Agricultural
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Agriculture
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agricultural
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12% in
use
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the
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