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The graph below shows the three different kinds of emission sources (oil / coal / gas) of greenhouse gas in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the three different kinds of emission sources (oil / coal / gas) of greenhouse gas in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of three main sources of greenhouse
gas
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 released into the air in the UK in the period of 20 years, between 1990 and 2010 .
Overall
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, It can be seen from the graph that the amount of oil and coal
emission
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emissions
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 decreased constantly,
While
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 the data on
gas
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 emissions saw an upward trend through the whole years surveyed. The
percentages
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percentage
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 of
gas
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 emissions rose from about 210
million
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tons
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 in 1990 to exactly 300
million
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tons
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 in 2000 and reached the highest point
around
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 320
million
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tons
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 in 2010. The information about oil emission sources fell to approximately 210
million
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tons
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 in 2010, after it reached about 260
million
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tons
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 in 2000. On the other side, the figure for coal emission of greenhouse
gas
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 in
UK
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the UK
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 had a downward trend, it fell from about 310
million
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tons
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 in 1990 to 210
million
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tons
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 in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gas, million, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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