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For centuries, important parts of education have remained, such as reading, writing and maths. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skills be made us a fourth skill to be added to the list. To what extent do you agree?

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Historically,
literacy
 was considered
the
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 major part of
educational
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 process. Since the development of the internet, many people believe that
computer
literacy
 must be added. I would share
this
 opinion as the modern world has evolved in
such
 a way that
computer
skills
 are the most important for
someones
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 education
as well as
work
. The first benefit that
computer
skills
 are required for is an education. Access to the internet gives
as
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us
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 an opportunity to study online. many universities provide courses, which can be studied entirely through the internet.
For example
, The University of Aberdeen
have
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 established an online school called Rowetta College as a part of their University. In brief.
computer
literacy
 allows students to get a degree without leaving home. The second benefit is that having
computer
skills
 will allow people to
work
 remotely. There are many opportunities these days to
work
 online.
For instance
,
computer
 specialists
work
 from anywhere in the world and
consequently
 can decide, where
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they want to
leave
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live
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. In short,
computer
skills
 will allow expand their opportunities
as well as
 choose where they want to
leave
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live
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. In conclusion,
computer
skills
 create new possibilities for people in relation to education and
work
. I believe that
computer
literacy
 is going to be the most important skill in the future.
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