You work for an international company and you need some time off to attend a family celebration. Write a letter to the company's manager. In your letter: Give details of the celebration Explain the reason why you need time off Suggest a way to have your work done during that time.

Dear Sir or Madam Hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
letter to you to request
one-week
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holiday, because I have to attend a very vital family celebration. I am planning to go
to
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on
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a
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apply
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vacation
due to
my brother's wedding party
wich
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which
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is going to be held in our hometown-Mubarek. We have planned all the things for
this
event,
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: the place where we celebrate
this
party is the "Diydor" restaurant. I think it will be a great party. You cannot imagine how
this
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important this
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celebration is
significant
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for me. There is just one person who always supported me in difficult situations and that's my brother. So, it will be
a
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unacceptable mistake if I don't attend
this
celebration. Well, I am taking a week off and I already have planned who can be responsible for my work during
this
time. And, that's my best colleague Shokh. I know he is so
hard-working
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person and that's why I have arranged for him to take care of my work. Don't worry, I know he can easily do it because of his experience in his previous work. I look forward to your reply Yours sincerely Pulat
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Coherence & Cohesion
While your letter is well-structured overall, it could benefit from more effective paragraphing, separating the introduction, body, and conclusion for greater clarity.
Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure you include a suitable greeting and closing; "Dear Sir or Madam" is appropriate, but try to conclude more professionally, perhaps with 'Kind regards' followed by your name.
Task Achievement
For task achievement, make sure you fully address all parts of the prompt. You did well in explaining the celebration and suggesting a replacement, but detailing the impact of your absence can strengthen your response.
Task Achievement
Consider using a more formal tone throughout the letter, avoiding informal expressions (e.g., 'wich', 'going to be held', 'great party'). Aim for precision and formality in language to reflect professional correspondence.

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