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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world?

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Many
people
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 believe
English
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 will be the only
as
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 their primary
language
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due to
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tourism
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the tourism
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 effect. Having only
one
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language
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 to be spoken will impact the connection and development of other
countries
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 globally,
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however
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however,
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 it might
also
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 affect
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’ identity as their
language
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also
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represent
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represents
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 their culture.
This
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 essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of
this
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 notion. On the
one
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 hand, learning
English
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 is
one
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 of the most important skills to acquire for many
people
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 as it
becomes
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has become
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primary
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a primary
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needs
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need
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 right now.
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, education has put
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english
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English
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 as
mandatory
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 subject for their students.
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, to have only
one
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language
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 and make
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as
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the
one
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 and only
language
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 will reduce the burden for many
people
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 to learn a second
language
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.
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,
people
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 will no longer need to translate and read different words if they go to other
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. It will help
people
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 to reduce the barrier to
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 and get more benefits to
learn
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.
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, a
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 is
also
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 an identity for many nations as it has historical values.
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, the development
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of
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 a
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take
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thousand
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a thousand
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 years for some
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.
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, many
asian
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Asian
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countries
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 have their own writing characters
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 as Arab, Korean, and
China
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Chinese
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 because they value their own
language
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 as
it
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apply
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their own
identities
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identity
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.
Therefore
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, the idea of having only
one
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language
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 will affect many
countries
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 as their
language
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make
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 them different from the rest. In conclusion, having
one
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language
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 as
main
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the main
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language
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 will give some advantages in terms of learning and development for both individuals and nations.
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, I believe
countries
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 need to have their own uniqueness.
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, languages should be protected as many
countries
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 believe it become their identity. There are many solutions for
people
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 to connect but it should not
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 languages.

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Task Achievement
Expand on your main points with more detailed examples. Specific real-world scenarios or statistics can add depth to your arguments.
Task Achievement
Develop a clearer thesis statement in your introduction. Make sure it concisely states the advantages and disadvantages of having one language.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure logical progression between paragraphs and ideas. Using cohesive devices (e.g., consequently, furthermore, therefore) can help, but should be varied and used appropriately to not seem repetitive.
Coherence and Cohesion
Integrate a brief summary of your key points in the conclusion, along with your final stance, to make it more impactful and clear.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Prominent
  • Contribute
  • Global
  • Advantages
  • Disadvantages
  • Communication
  • Understanding
  • Ease
  • Business
  • Trade
  • Cultural exchange
  • Unity
  • Access
  • Information
  • Simplify
  • Travel
  • Tourism
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