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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The provided table illustrates the information on unemployment in England, who spent their leisure time on different types of activities
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 year. The data is given in percentages, and it can be split into two genders, boys and girls. In general, It is obvious
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 that both genders spend most of the time in the morning on job hunting and housework, afternoon watching TV and housework. First of all, the data below shows the information of people who had no job spent their free time in each different activities. Starting from the male's morning and afternoon routine. Job hunting and shopping were the most popular things for them in the morning, at 20% to 22% respectively.
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 at noon, the trend had changed to watching TV and gardening to merely 15%.
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, the highest number of female activities in the morning were house jobs, above 50% and shopping roughly over 25%.
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, cleaning a house duty was still in the highest place accounting for 12%, but lower than in the morning.
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, the people's routine experienced the most, which was shopping and visiting friends by 17%.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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