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The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 graph gives
the
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information about the divergent sources of
air
 pollution in the United Kingdom over 15 years period between 1990 and 2005.
Overall
, the pollutions were created by transport, Industry, the total
air
 pollutants, and
household
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households
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.
Furthermore
,
industry
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the industry
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 was the most part of the reason
of
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 pollution, the households were the least polluted in the
air
 during the period.
While
the
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transportation was the only one that slightly increased, the
mostly
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emissions
were
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clearly decreased. Especially in industrial parts took 5.5
million
tonnes
estimately
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estimated
estimate
,which was more than 4.5
million
tonnes
 by other parts.
Moreover
, it peaked
to
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 3
million
tonnes
 in 2005 ,
however
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 it still hit the highest point. Not only the industrial
emission
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emissions
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 but
also
founded
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 that almost every
sources
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dropped out in 1990,
reach
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 the bottom in 2005.
Additionally
, the lowest point was 0.1
million
tonnes
 approximately in 2005 which
created
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 from the population living.
As a result
, the total
air
 pollutants
were
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declined by the majority of sources ,
that
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went down by discharging the polluted
air
 over the years from 1990 to 2005
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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