The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
The bar chart provides information about the different expenditure rates of households' weekly earnings between 1968 and 2018 in a certain country.
Overall
, it can be seen that
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families used to spend more money on food but now they spend more on convenience activities.
However
, the same percentage of income was spent on household goods in both years.
To begin
, in 1968, food had the highest percentage of the total income at 35%.
Also
, following that, was housing, clothing and
foot wear
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at 10%. The total percentage of funds spent on leisure activities was less than 10 per cent.
While
the least money was spent on fuel and power supply.
On the other hand
, in 2018, families tended to splurge on leisure activities and housing with approximately 23% of their earnings on convenience and a little below 20 per cent on accommodation.
However
, very little funds were spent on personal goods, fuel and power which was not up to 5 per cent of the total weekly funds.
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