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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1
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The bar graph compares the percentage of individuals born within
Austalia
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Australia
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 and outside and who were living in urban, rural and town
areas
 between 1995 and 2010.
Overall
, the highest number of
people
 were born in cities in 1995, and 2010 within
Australia
 and outside.
People
 born in rural
areas
 of
Australia
 were
on
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in
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 the second position in 1995 with
slight
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the slight
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 exception in 2010 for
people
 born outside the rural
areas
 of
Australia
. In 1995, about 60% of individuals were born outside the
Australian
 cities and approximately more than 40% were born in
Australian
 cities in 2010. In
Austalian
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Australian
 towns, about 20% were born in 1995 which slightly declined by 2010. Outside
Australian
 towns, about 40%
people
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 were born in rural
areas
 in 1995 which significantly dropped in 2010 compared to
people
 born in the rural
areas
 of
Australia
.
However
, one interesting trend was that the number of
people
 born within
Australian
 towns and rural
areas
were
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was
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same
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the same
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 in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words areas, people, australia, australian with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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