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The table below shows the percentage of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011

The table below shows the percentage of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011
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The table provides the percentage of people in five different
age
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 groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011.
Overall
Linking Words
,the 0-9
age
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 group are the highest rode bicycles group whether female or male,
while
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 the 40-59
age
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 groups are the lowest one. In more detail,
female
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females
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 and
male
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males
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 share almost the same percentage in
0
Correct article usage
the 0
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-9
age
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 group, which
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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accounted for 51.3 and 50.3, respectively.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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