The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.

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The line chart describes information about the

percentage

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of unemployment rate in Australia including urban and rural sites during four quarters.

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, it is noticeable that both

areas

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experinced

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experienced

some fluctuations. It was

also

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witnessed that

percentage

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unemployment rates in rural

areas

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reached highest at the beginning,

however

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the number of both

areas

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were nearly similar

at the end

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quarter

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the quarter

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. Looking in more detail,

unemployment

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the unemployment

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percentage

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in rural locations stood and reached

highest

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its highest

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over 6%.

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it was followed by a gradual drop until

second

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the second

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quarter

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and

experinced

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experienced

some fluctuations during

two

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the two

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period

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periods

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. After that, the amount of rate steadily decreased and

unchange

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changed

after the end of time. Meanwhile, urban

areas

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begun

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began

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2% and significantly rose in

second

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the second

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quarter

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Next,

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there was

sharp

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a sharp

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fall and peaked

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at a

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the

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lowest

percentage

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third

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the third

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quarter

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. After that, it

was

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apply

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continued

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with

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apply

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dramatic growth and some fluctuations until

fourth

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the fourth

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quarter

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Then

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, the

percentage

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enumployment

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unemployment

employment

rates in urban sites dramatically increased after

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last

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the last

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quarter

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, areas, quarter with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.

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7
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
25
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

164 words

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