The following graph shows the percentage of unemployment rates for the female in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart illustrates the information about the different kinds of unemployment rates for
the
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apply
female
in 4 counties of the UK between 2013 and 2014.
Fix the agreement mistake
females
Overall
, in both the years, 2013 to 2014, jobless women decrease
Wrong verb form
decreased
around
5 to 7% except Change preposition
by around
Scotland
having Change preposition
in Scotland
a
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apply
increase
slightly.
It can be seen that 6.8 Replace the word
increased
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
woman
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women
who
had no job in 2013 Correct pronoun usage
apply
while
there are 5,4 % women
were jobless in Wales which was the lowest among the shown. Change preposition
of women
Besides
, there are 6,1% and 5,6% of women who were unemployed in Scotland and Northern Ireland respective
.
In 2014, the unemployment Change the word
respectively
females
in England, Wales and Northern Ireland dropped 0.3%, 0.4% and 1.6% respectively. Change preposition
of females
Whereas
, in Scotland
the rate of unemployed females had Add a comma
Scotland,
a increases
and Correct the article-noun agreement
increases
an increase
reach
Wrong verb form
reached
at
6,7% which was the highest in 2014.Change preposition
apply
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