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The following graph shows the percentage of unemployment rates for the female in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The following graph shows the percentage of unemployment rates for the female in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart illustrates the information about the different kinds of unemployment rates for
the
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female
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females
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 in 4 counties of the UK between 2013 and 2014.
Overall
, in both the years, 2013 to 2014, jobless women
decrease
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decreased
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around
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by around
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 5 to 7% except
Scotland
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in Scotland
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 having
a
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increase
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increased
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 slightly. It can be seen that 6.8
percent
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per cent
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woman
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women
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who
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had no job in 2013
while
 there are 5,4 %
women
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of women
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 were jobless in Wales which was the lowest among the shown.
Besides
, there are 6,1% and 5,6% of women who were unemployed in Scotland and Northern Ireland
respective
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respectively
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. In 2014, the unemployment
females
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of females
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 in England, Wales and Northern Ireland dropped 0.3%, 0.4% and 1.6% respectively.
Whereas
, in
Scotland
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Scotland,
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 the rate of unemployed females had
a increases
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increases
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 and
reach
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reached
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at
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apply
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6,7% which was the highest in 2014.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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