The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The first line graph illustrates the of overseas
students
(Commencing and total) enrolments in Australian universities over the period of ten years from 2001 until 2010,
while
the second line graph illustrates the
number
of local
students
enrollment. The units are measured in thousands of people.
Overall
, for the overseas
students
both commencing and total increased throughout the given period. Local
students
,
on the other hand
, had a very huge gap between the commencing and total
number
of the
students
even though both of them increased as well. The line graph of the overseas
students
indicates that there wasn’t a large gap in 2001 between the commencing and total, as the deference was only about 10,000.
While
,
at the end
of 2010, the total
number
became double the
number
of commencing
students
, which was around 80,000
students
for the total and 40,000 for the commencing.
On the other hand
, for the local
students
numbers, there was a large gap from the beginning. It was less than 20,0000 commencing
students
and 40,0000 total. The total
number
of
students
increased significantly until it reached a constant amount of 60,0000 in the
last
four years,
while
the commencing
students
number
was fluctuating throughout the period until it reach a slight increase
at the end
with a slightly more the 20,0000
students
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